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Bloody Tears by MissMontgomeryx Bloody Tears by MissMontgomeryx
My scanner ate all the colors T_T
Her eyes <they turned out horrible :cry: > were red!!
I also tried to make her hair look real but I guess I did not succeeded. :(

Anyyyway I promise I'll do something better next time so please don't hate me for this feeble attempt on drawing T_T

xDD

Enma Ai (c) Ken'ichi Kanemaki

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Can you feel that?
Ah, shit

Drowning deep in my sea of loathing
Broken your servant I kneel
(Will you give in to me?)
It seems what's left of my human side
Is slowly changing in me
(Will you give in to me?)

Looking at my own reflection
When suddenly it changes
Violently it changes (oh no)
There is no turning back now
You've woken up the demon in me

Get up, come on get down with the sickness
Open up your hate, and let it flow into me
Get up, come on get down with the sickness
You mother get up come on get down with the sickness
You fucker get up come on get down with the sickness
Madness is the gift, that has been given to me

I can see inside you, the sickness is rising
Don't try to deny what you feel
(Will you give in to me?)
It seems that all that was good has died
And is decaying in me
(Will you give in to me?)

It seems you're having some trouble
In dealing with these changes
Living with these changes (oh no)
The world is a scary place
Now that you've woken up the demon in me
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I myself am not an artist who draws in the anime/manga style but I think that I can provide some opinion and guidance based on what I'm seeing in this work.

First I'd like to point out that you have given this work a good sense of proportion - the curve of the face is very well done and overall there's some real potential here once the rough edges are smoothed out.

You don't talk about how you created the work so I'm forced to guess that perhaps you drew in pencil and then inked over the original lines?

I'm guessing at that method because I'm seeing what I think is a "doubling" of some of the line work along with appears to be a number of 'hesitation' marks on the longer lines.

Either way I would suggest that you work on giving your line work a 'smoother' appearance by using longer, steadier strokes so that the lines look more fluid and less shaky. If you are tracing over pencil work with pen you might find it easier if you use the pencil more as a guide rather than trying to ink directly over it or you might be able to achieve a smoother line by using a different pen type since some just lend themselves to a fluid line better than others.

As you pointed out yourself, the characters left eye is a bit "off" when compared to the right eye so I won't dwell there other than to suggest that maybe providing a more solid coloring job to the eyelashes might have helped clean them up a bit; right now you can see the individual pen strokes and it's a bit distracting.

There is a similar issue with the hair. I think ideally you want to try to present the hair in this type of drawing as a solid color as much as possible. The individual pen stokes are visible here and while that alone is not necessarily a bad thing those strokes are going every which way and appear 'blocky" in that you scribbled them in every couple of inches rather than carrying through the line work along the length of the hair; this makes the hair look a bit stiff and clunky despite the wavy outline you've given it.

The hair also has some lighter areas spread across it. I'm uncertain as to whether this is a deliberate attempt at highlighting the hair or if it is an accidental result of bearing down on the paper while you filled in the color.

If it is a deliberate attempt at highlighting then I would suggest that you study how the more advanced artists draw this in; it's usually treated in what could be considered to be a more deliberate and stylized fashion then what you've done here with a bit more attention paid to where the hair should "shine".

If those lighter areas are the accidental result of putting uneven pressure on the paper itself then you can probably address that by changing drawing tools to something which will enable you to place darker color using less pressure.

I would also suggest that you experiment with giving the body of the hair a more flowing appearance with softer curves which would reduce the branchlike appearance - with smoother curves and a more flowing appearance combined with a more solid color the hair alone could give a piece like this a much more striking appearance and more impact.

The last thing I'll bring up is that I notice you've made some token attempts at shading along the shoulder and collar bone area along with under the chin. I'd suggest doing away with this shading entirely and try to focus more on a high contrast between very pale while skin and very dark flowing hair - if you get that going for you the token shading becomes entirely unnecessary and distracting.
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Hakaiisha Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010  Hobbyist
whooah, the hair is amazing
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XLunatic-nightmareX Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010  Student Digital Artist
I really like this,her hair looks really nice! >w< Better then most hair I draw xD
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